Opening post by Demi Lune
May 09th - 03:10
In Port Ceres's delivery quest:
You see a poor young man staring at his garden and sobbing.
You, being a wonderful person, ask him what's wrong.
"My garden!" the young man sobs. "Some stupid chimera thing and ate it all, stomped all over everything. I woke up and beat it away, but the damage was done. I need this garden to eat, my job at the coffee shop only pays so much..."
"Went and ate it all"?
Also, in Insula:
Before she died, she gave it to me and said one day I'll pass it on to someone who changed my life: and you have. I've decided on my 14th birth day, I'm going to go to school to become a strong monster breeder just like you." you are speechless. :o
Could be "life;", and also, capital Y in you.
Oh, and capital Y in the you at the end, too.
Edit: The lore about magic:
"People study very hard all their lives and still some can barely make a spark with the snap of their fingers, while those who have studied the same account can cast a fireball with ease. Due to this, it's very discouraging to many, so that toppled with the fact you typically don't make money with magic, makes magic in Aerra very rare!"
Same amount, isntead of account? And topped, instead of toppled?
You see a poor young man staring at his garden and sobbing.
You, being a wonderful person, ask him what's wrong.
"My garden!" the young man sobs. "Some stupid chimera thing and ate it all, stomped all over everything. I woke up and beat it away, but the damage was done. I need this garden to eat, my job at the coffee shop only pays so much..."
"Went and ate it all"?
Also, in Insula:
Before she died, she gave it to me and said one day I'll pass it on to someone who changed my life: and you have. I've decided on my 14th birth day, I'm going to go to school to become a strong monster breeder just like you." you are speechless. :o
Could be "life;", and also, capital Y in you.
Oh, and capital Y in the you at the end, too.
Edit: The lore about magic:
"People study very hard all their lives and still some can barely make a spark with the snap of their fingers, while those who have studied the same account can cast a fireball with ease. Due to this, it's very discouraging to many, so that toppled with the fact you typically don't make money with magic, makes magic in Aerra very rare!"
Same amount, isntead of account? And topped, instead of toppled?
But when that call never comes, it's time to face what you've become - there's no point doing all of this, unless you know you're having fun.
edited thrice, with the latest on May 09th, 2009 17:20:51 by Demi Lune
